My 10 min Flash animation I made in Tsukuba University, Japan, in 2008, during my scholarship (4 months) provided by Japan International Cooperation Agency.
Without sound, presents information about the environmental damage by cattle breeding (which includes of course meat producing and animals slaughter).
1) Is it too boring, with so much information? The way the information is presented is ok? 2) The visual art is nice, with proper drawing stylization and effects? 3) Is it cute and proper for all kinds of public? 4) Is the plot of the documentary acceptable? 5) The absence of sound is a bad thing to the animation? Putting sound would help it a lot? 6) Do you feel any motivation about changing your habit of consuming animals by watching this movie?
1) Is it too boring, with so much information? The way the information is presented is ok? I don't think that the amount of information made it at all tedious, however I do feel that it was quite a long presentation. This is nothing major and probably comes down to personal preferance.
2) The visual art is nice, with proper drawing stylization and effects? The visual art was good, yes, however I feel it wasn't very professional. I've used flash multiple times and I empathise with how hard it is often to create a great looking animation - I can't do it, even with my graphics tablet. The animation, on the other hand, is wonderfully executed and very smooth.
3) Is it cute and proper for all kinds of public? Yes
4) Is the plot of the documentary acceptable? I think so, yeah.
5) The absence of sound is a bad thing to the animation? Putting sound would help it a lot? I'd prefer it with sound - I think it'd make it more interesting and easier to follow too.
6) Do you feel any motivation about changing your habit of consuming animals by watching this movie? As much as I enjoyed this presentation, my meat-eating habits will be staying the same, sorry.
Animation. Wow. I'm impressed - you are a man of many disciples aren't you?
1) Is it too boring, with so much information? The way the information is presented is ok?
I guess the main thing for me is how long it took. I imagine this being presented as an advertisement, where you have a very short amount of time to grab and maintain the audience's attention. If this was an advertisement then the amount of information you have wouldn't work. But seeing as it is meant to be a documentary it has a good amount of information in it. The way the information is presented seems to be all right, although perhaps a more professional looking font might work a bit better.
2) The visual art is nice, with proper drawing stylization and effects?
Personally I didn't quite like the style of animation but to me it looks as though you weren't too familiar with flash or you were perhaps new to animating so I can't really judge too harshly on that one. I guess the cartoon format made it a bit difficult for me to take seriously as a documentary but this is a personal opinion so don't take it too harshly.
3) Is it cute and proper for all kinds of public?
I think it's proper for all kinds of public. I don't see how it wouldn't be.
4) Is the plot of the documentary acceptable?
I think so yes.
5) The absence of sound is a bad thing to the animation? Putting sound would help it a lot?
I think some sound would help a lot - especially the dialogue parts of the president. Why read it if you can hear it? Animation is a medium that is usual not solely visual and putting in dialogue would probably pick up the pace of the animation a bit. Sound also attracts and helps maintain a viewer's attention. I actually found the lack of sound oddly distracting - some kind of soundtrack music would work over it. Adding music can also enhance the emotions people feel when viewing a piece so I think it would really add to it.
6) Do you feel any motivation about changing your habit of consuming animals by watching this movie?
This documentary was quite an eye-opener for me and it was quite interesting. However I will still be eating meat after this.
Wow, I feel like I've been quite harsh with this critique. But hey, this is only one person's opinion and feel free to disregard it.
I'm here from #Critique-It. Thank you so much for posting this, as it was incredibly interesting to learn about environmental damage (as I was not so clued up before) and in such a nice format, too. I don't often watch flash animations, but this did well to impress me. Now, for your points.
Firstly, I do think that the visual art was well done, it was colourful and the animation was very smooth. I'm no expert at Flash, but I can tell this was a great piece. However, I might have appreciated it being slightly shorter, especially if you wanted the demographic to reach out to a younger audience, too. I would have also appreciated sound; perhaps it would have been better to have a narrative overlay, rather than text screens, as this is generally more interesting to watch and would have allowed the watcher to become more involved with the plot as you aren't cutting off the visuals repeatedly.
Otherwise, it was a great piece and you should be proud! Personally, it didn't change my beliefs, but only because I am a carnivore.
thanks a lot for your appreciation of my animation! it took months of efforts! ahah
yes, it was really my fear, that it ended up a bit longer than the ideal... my fault was not summarize enough, instead of willing to put so much information i considered important. about, the sound, please take a look on my other answer here (basically i couldnīt meet the deadline to put the sound): [link]
unfortunately also this one was the best "narrative overlay" i could think of to convey all the information i wanted to transmit... well, maybe because i got a degree on journalism, not on TV & Film... or could i blame my personal abilities for that. i thought that if i put more narrative style, a lot of information would be lost. anyway i do need to improve my narrative skills, and iīm really accepting more specific suggestions on that!
iīm just wondering whatīs the value of the information i researched and you could learn, if not applied into practice... īcause itīs not related to religions to have beliefs or faiths, the sources are all in the end of the movie, like FAO and Greenpeace. btw, i didnīt know we were from different species!
1) I didn't think it was boring at all. It kept my attention fully. I like how you left a few seconds to let the viewer actually read the information. 2) The visual art is awesome! It's made in a silly cartoon way, but still kept my attention. 3) Yes, it's proper for people of all ages. It's something I could really see being in schools. 4) The animation and the information you've provided go hand in hand. 5) Not having sound made it a little weird at first. Maybe it could of had sound effects in the background? Like birds for the beginning, crackling fire, cows mooing, etc. 6) As much as I liked this, I do like to eat beef still. I just rather not think about them getting killed. If that makes sense.
hi, dear blondekatastrophe, thank you a lot for your careful audience and praising critique!
about the silence and other issues, please take a look on my answers to ravenclaw: [link]
about the consumption of animals... well, i did like really a lot to eat them either and exactly as you i just didnīt think about the meaning behind this habit before. but i think youīd agree that one thing is mere taste, another one is individual lives and serious damage to our planet.
for this reason i put all my efforts on this movie named "Behind the Cattle": so people can get informed about that and think about it. not only in behalf of animal rights, but in this case in behalf of our planet/environment too.
I love your other work, but this falls short. Maybe I just can't get past the style; I love hand drawn and hate the sterility of the use of the vectors. You are exceptional at traditional art, apply it to your animation. Believe it or not, frame by frame takes less time to produce than paper-puppet symbol moving.
well, this animation was made in 2008, i wasnīt training arts in that time, just since the last year. actually in 2008 I was in a Websites Development course in the Japanese university. actually, i prefer the traditional art too.
could you explain me what do you mean by "frame by frame" and "paper-puppet symbol moving"? would it be respectively traditionally drawing and using the flash resources?
Sorry. I didn't see the time tag; I must have given you a lot of misdirected criticism
Frame by frame is when you redraw the figures every frame. This can be done with flash, but it is easiest to do traditionally with a lightboard.
Paper-puppet animation is when you cut out the limbs of a figure and move it in a stop motion animation. In flash, you can do this by crafting symbols and moving them around. Some people can do this well, but it generally looks childish.
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